Comments on: The Aliens Came Alphabetically (short story challenge)

By: danielle

danielle — Mon, 16 Nov 2009 18:28:23 +0000

This is interesting.I like it!

By: danielle

danielle — Mon, 16 Nov 2009 18:27:53 +0000

This is interesting.Ilike it!

By: MBH

MBH — Mon, 26 Oct 2009 09:54:02 +0000

That is excellent, a great little story, strong on its own without the alphabet.

By: Nathaniel Robinson

Nathaniel Robinson — Mon, 19 Oct 2009 10:40:34 +0000

"What the hell does the mention of Uluru have to do with the narrator's voice??" I don't know. It's almost certainly a personal thing. Where I live "Ayers Rock" is the more casual name for Uluru, but as I said - all it did was make me stop reading for a moment. It broke the flow for me. For all I know, "Uluru" is the accepted term wherever it is the narrator lives.. in which case, that makes perfect sense. It wasn't an attack or anything, simply an interesting personal note I thought I'd mention. All it did was clash for me, on my reading of the story. The rest, to my eyes, is near perfect.

By: Merrilee

Merrilee — Mon, 19 Oct 2009 05:19:37 +0000

What the hell does the mention of Uluru have to do with the narrator's voice??

By: Cassie

Cassie — Sat, 17 Oct 2009 19:41:30 +0000

Oh that was fantastic! I'm so impressed that you managed to do that within the context of the alphabet sentence challenge - goes to show that you can really do great things even working on such a specific criteria. Well done

By: Nathaniel Robinson

Nathaniel Robinson — Thu, 15 Oct 2009 13:20:30 +0000

"This is pretty good, a little strange, very creepy.. but what's so special about.. oh god oh god it's alphabetical oh god.." That is my reaction summed up. Even though I know it goes against the alphabetical novelty, I'd love to see this expanded a little.. it could function very, very well as a weird/horror story in its own right. My only problems with the story were the references to Uluru - which seemed to clash a little with the narrator's voice, but that's probably just a personal reaction; the last line ('Z'), which I think was too long but damn well acceptable considering the challenge, and the fact that it's TOO GOD DAMN SHORT. Seriously. Great stuff.

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By: Janette

Janette — Wed, 14 Oct 2009 20:45:46 +0000

11 out of 10 for extreme creepiness. You have successfully pushed my distaste for yabbies into a full-blown phobia, not to mention creating a very elegant solution to 'k' - nice one!!

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